Thursday, 12 September 2013

Simon's feedback for version 1 script

-Good Premise
-Timely
-Mature but works with children's television

-Maisy

  • Really good character- Her language and personality is the USP of the series.
  • Interacts well with her friends. 
-Need to consider the series-
  • How many episodes?
  • Overall story, what happens to Maisy?
  • Should sew seeds for later episodes.

-Maisy and her mum have a really good role rehearsal- build on it. 

-Don't be afraid to be more melodramatic, bigger funnier scenes.

-Write a scene starting a new storyline with Cassie or Gemma, that can be extended in a later episode. 

-Will work best as a TV series for CITV/CBBC. 

-New idea
Lose the back to school disco and have a cool house party that is at Joe and Cassie's. But Joe is adamant Cassie and her friends aren't allowed to come to. Maisy knows that her way to Jack is at the party so she along with Cassie and Gemma come up with a way to go to it. - work on this.

Have a mockumentry feel to it, using vlogs, this way we can see more into Maisy's life and afford to lose some scenes. 


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